Friday, September 3, 2010

Steampunk Haiku???


 
Stephanie Thornton over at Hatshepsut: The Writing of a Novel is hosting a Haiku blogfest. Here's her description of the event:

I know a lot of you like blogfests, but don't have time to write a 500 word piece or you don't want to post excerpts from your WIP. I feel your pain. Some of you like to write poetry, but like me, you don't think you're very good at it. But haikus are a piece of cake, just three lines with 5, 7, and 5 moras respectively. Easy peasy!

"Easy peasy," she says. Ha!
 
I've written and taught my fair share of poetry over the years. I enjoy poetry. I even have favourite poets -- Margaret Atwood, Dennis Lee, Shel Silverstein, Robert Frost. Three of those poets write rhyming poetry - 2 write silly, fun rhyming poetry. One writes thought-provoking free verse ranging from serious to bizarre.
 
None of them write haiku. I've never taught the haiku form of poetry. I've never written a haiku.
 
But Stephanie's a sweetie and she was very convincing. So I clicked on the linky thingy. And proceeded to forget about it. Until now. After much fiddling I've created 3 that represent my book & the characters. Duck out now if you like - I'll never tell :)
 
So after all that rambling and avoiding and procrastinating, here are my haiku...
 
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Orphaned and alone
Searching the streets for answers
Finding them and worse
 
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Nico's mentor's dead
Killers still want what he made
He won't let them win
 
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In Steampunk England
Tinkerings to assist them
Looking for killers

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None of them give the exact feel of the book, but each of them highlights a small part. Not quite what I was hoping for, but at least I didn't come up blank!

So how are your haiku skills? Do you write them? Any haiku horror stories from the past to share?? :)
 
Don't forget to click on Stephanie's link to visit all of the other entries!

100 comments:

  1. Haikus can be fun. Yours are good and I like the way they create the mood of your book.

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  2. Thanks Holly. I don't stick well to patterns - I tend to work outside the box much better than inside the box, but I'm okay with these :)

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  3. There was a time when I was very young (and that is an excuse) when I thought I could do haikus. I no longer suffer from that delusion.

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  4. Geez, look at me answering your question without telling you that your haikus created the same mood in me as the painting you chose- which must be the mark of a good haiku.

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  5. Rayna - awww thanks. I know they're not great, but if they create the mood, I'm happy :)

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  6. These are Great Jemi, I am no good at them at all.

    Enjoy your week-end.
    Yvonne.

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  7. I'm impressed, Jemi! I'm rubbish at haikus; much better at free verse.

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  8. Good for you! I'm not a poet and would create a terrible haikus.

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  9. Yvonne - thanks! And I don't believe you for a second. With your poetry skills, you'd make some great one :)

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  10. the first one is really good. I don't write them but I have read a bit about them. I didn't participate in the fest, but you did well.

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  11. Thanks Talli - I prefer free verse as well - the words just flow better for me. Although it's been a long while since I've written poetry of any kind. Gotta fix that.

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  12. Diane - thanks! I doubt it though - you have a lovely way with words :)

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  13. Thanks Summer - I signed up in a moment of lunacy and then realized I'd actually have to follow through! Yikes!

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  14. Hi Jemi. First, big points for bravery. Trying new stuff is what makes life fun. I think your poems fit the tone of that picture you chose and give a moody, dark feeling for the book. Nice job.

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  15. I love haikus and think yours are grand! I like being forced to a form from time to time. Let's all try sonnets! OK - later...

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  16. I think your haikus is great. I don't think I could do one line much less three.

    Mason
    Thoughts in Progress

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  17. Tricia - thanks! I've decided to be braver in the new year (I tend to count by school years :)) and this is the result! :)

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  18. Jan - Dear heavens! Sonnets!!! You're trying to send me right over the edge!

    Thanks :)

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  19. Mason - thanks! I'm trying to get a little braver in my world - and taking risks is a good thing... right? :)

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  20. Haiku is fun. I love reading them and even creating them. Steampunk haiku must be your original invention.

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  21. I love haiku. Usually use them for comedic effect, but they can be beautiful, too.

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  22. Susan - thanks! It was fun to give it a try - I had to keep checking on my fingers to see if my syllables were right! :)

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  23. Summer - none of mine will be beautiful, but I have seen some amazing ones already. Some poets create such imagery in such a short space. :)

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  24. I love that you put three together to encapsulate your book! And I really like the line "Tinkerings to assist them" which really reflects the steampunk element. Nicely done!

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  25. Oh, I hadn't heard this news yet. Thanks, Jemi! :-)

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  26. Steampunk haiku -- Jemi, you never fail to amaze me :-)

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  27. Thanks Amalia - I had to use 3 because I couldn't do it in 1!! I can't believe how many can do it - yourself included :)

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  28. Shannon - any time! Stephanie's a sweetie but this was a little beyond my talents :)

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  29. Agnes - You never quite know what you're going to get when you drop by! This is my weird and wonderful world! :)

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  30. Alex - I know how you feel! I enjoy poetry, but writing it is NOT my forte and I've never shared before :)

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  31. Outstanding! So Awesome you were able to capture moments in your book, and the haiku work beautifully with the painting. Great atmosphere.

    I have no haiku skills, but it was fun to give them a try… once. :)

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  32. VR - thanks! I'm surprised it even worked a little bit to be completely honest :)

    I'll pop on over and check yours out as soon as I'm a computer when I can do that!

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  33. That first one is POWERFUL and haunting...so good.

    I hope your weekend
    is relaxing and lovely
    know you are adored

    Love,
    Lola

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  34. Thanks Lola!! :)

    You're so awesome - that one would have taken me forever to create!! And thank you :)

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  35. Great idea, to use haiku to highlight different aspects of your book. You think an agent would accept a query letter in haiku form?

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  36. Franklin - what a terrifying idea! Although it probably can't be any more difficult than writing a query, can it? :)

    Thanks for dropping by!

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  37. Jemi, I am AWFUL at haikus and all poetry but would LOVE to take a class..

    Blessings,
    Patti

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  38. Patti - I enjoy poetry - but don't write much of it - and obviously don't do haiku a lot! :)

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  39. I like the first one! Nice mood is set in it!

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  40. Wait--I mean, I like *all* of them, but specifically the first one. :)

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  41. I really liked the first one. It is hard to attempt a written form that you have no experience in tackling.

    You did a great job, Roland

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  42. Just Another Sarah - lol :)

    Thanks! I haven't made it all the way through the entries yet, I'll get to yours soon!

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  43. Roland - thanks! It's fun trying something new - but putting it on show is another story :)

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  44. Nicely done! I agree with Amalia, I like that line "tinkerings to assist them." And the picture works well with all of them.

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  45. M. Bail - thanks so much :)

    I appreciate your comment - this was more stressful than I'd care to admit!

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  46. I like how your haiku represent your book, and I enjoyed them!

    The first one in particular spoke to me. Finding the answers is not always a good thing...

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  47. Great job, Jemi! I think haiku are really challenging to write.

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  48. What a great way to sum up your book. I shall have a go at doing mine.

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  49. Amanda - thanks! Yes - answers aren't always what you think they're going to be. :)

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  50. Thanks Elizabeth! I think they are too! Some of the ones in the blogfest are so lyrical - almost magic what some poets can do with so few words. :)

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  51. Jarmara - it's fun! I know mine aren't deep or especially good, but they were fun to write. :)

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  52. I think you are being overly modest :) Your haiku conjure up image and atmosphere - loved the first one especially, very well done!

    Like you, I signed up for the fest and then happily forgot about it...

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  53. Viridian - thank you! I'm so glad they aren't as weak as I worried they might be :)

    Nothing quite like that panic attack when you see someone's blog post announcing the blogfest you've completely forgotten about!! :)

    Thanks for dropping by.

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  54. That's brilliant, Jemi. I love haikus. I especially love the tightness of their structure... and their manageable length.

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  55. Rosalind - awww - thanks :)

    I'm always a little afraid of things that trap me into a structure - I'm more a free verse kind of gal. But this was fun!

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  56. Dark, funky and cool. New take on a haiku.

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  57. Wendy - Thanks! :) I'm pleased I was able to come up with anything at all!

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  58. Dropping in from the bbq for a few Tums tablets. LOL. Since I've been following ya on Twitter for a while, it's nice to be able to "meet"/follow here too.

    Have a great weekend.

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  59. Angie - good idea! I'll do the same :)

    Hope you're feeling better and have a good weekend!

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  60. That's some good haiku skills you have there Jemi!

    And I love Lola's haiku. Ha, you ARE adored! :)

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  61. Thanks Karen :) I was a little terrified to post, but I'm working on getting braver!

    You're such a sweetie - and Lola is too! Thanks so much!! :)

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  62. Love the steampunk haiku!!!
    I'm terrible at Haiku

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  63. Lynda - thanks :)

    It was a challenge - I've never written one before - but it was fun! :)

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  64. Well at the risk of being pelted with sushi and sashimi I'm going to be honest and say I'm not a fan of haikus. I just never really got it. I've read some that were kind of nice, but I don't go out of my way to look for them. Perhaps I should try composing some myself someday to gain a better appreciation for the art form.
    That being said, yours were a noble effort.
    Now let me duck this bowl of noodles coming my way.

    Lee
    Tossing It Out

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  65. Arlee - lol :) No sushi or sashimi!

    Each to their own. I don't do a lot of haiku writing myself ... actually only these 3 ever. But it was a fun challenge and I actually enjoyed trying it!

    I'm always thankful that we all like different things and do different things. Can you imagine how incredibly dull life would be if we all liked the same? So go on with your haiku apathy - I'll support your right! :)

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  66. I write a little poetry and have tried haiku a few times. I write children's stories, so my favorite poetry is rhyming.

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  67. Janet - there are so many good rhyming poets for kids. My kids loved Dennis Lee - their favourite book was Jelly Belly. It's been years and we can all still quote from it :)

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  68. I really like that last one- it has me totally intrigued about your book (as if I wasn't already!).

    And I know what you mean about writing haikus- I've never been good at them, but I feel like they're a somewhat manageable form of poetry. If I keep my expectations for myself nice and low, that is! :)

    Happy weekend!

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  69. Stephanie - thanks :)

    I agree - the haiku isn't nearly as intimidating as some other forms. I enjoyed the challenge.

    Congrats on the blogfest - there were tons of great poems! Great job!

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  70. Great haikus! I considered writing one about one of my characters, but wrote about vacation instead. Maybe I'll try a character one today.

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  71. Thanks Rebecca!

    Vacation is always good - whether we're experiencing it or writing about it! :)

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  72. Wonderful haiku! It's hard to condense the essence of a novel into 17 little syllables (I know my own attempt fell far short), but each of yours provide just enough flavor of the tale to intrigue me to read more. Well done!

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  73. Nate - Thank you!

    It is hard - even worse than a query! :) I'm glad it came out okay! :)

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  74. I've written a few, back in my college English Lit days, but nothing worth remembering or repeating. I think you did quite well!

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  75. I'm terrible at poetry. Haikus included. But I thought yours were good! It's a fun concept . . . to capture your book on a Haiku.

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  76. Helen - thanks - I really was nervous to post them!

    I'm an English major and I took a few extra English classes in high school, but never wrote a haiku. Odd.

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  77. Janet - lol :)

    It was fun. Not my usual thing, but it was fun to try. I'm forcing myself to take more risks this year!

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  78. Jemi - These were great! My editor is a steampunk lover. She'd get a kick out of these.

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  79. RaShelle - thank you :)

    I love steampunk - it's such a great world - so many possibilities!

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  80. Here from KarenG's
    Love your wonderful haikus
    Enjoy your weekend!

    :-)

    Take care
    x

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  81. Old Kitty - thanks so much!

    I've met quite a few new friends from Karen's - she's got so many great ideas!

    Have a great weekend :)

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  82. Those were great haikus! They'd be fun to try. I just might have to.

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  83. Laura - Thank you!

    It was fun to try - I wasn't too sure at first, but you kind of find a rhythm and then you're off!

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  84. Nice! Great idea to write haiku about your book. I'm even more curious now, heh. I also love the picture you chose!

    As for my poor efforts of poetry writing, they usually have no rhyme, so nope, no haiku for me, thanks. I go for free verses, when I dare that is. :p

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  85. Thanks Mari! I'm glad they worked pretty well.

    Free verse is fun - I like it as well. Although I've been known to write a few satires based on Twas the Night Before Christmas :)

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  86. Very nice!

    My daughter writes great Haikus...I've never tried...

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  87. Thanks Sharon. I've never tried until now either! I know lots of people love them though. Looks like your daughter is going to be a writer as well! :)

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  88. Good job! And intriguing. I bet your book is great!

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  89. I really like Haikus- they can be very striking! And you did a great job :) I wish I had the talent to write them…

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  90. Lua - thank you! They are fun to try - and I found I got into a kind of rhythm after a few tries. :)

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  91. Not a fan...only because I struggle with them. I enjoyed yours.

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  92. Wow, I like this! Yours turned out great! I'm pretty awful at any kind of poetry, but since haikus have a formula, that might be one that I can somewhat pull off. I'll tinker around with it. Thanks for sharing!

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  93. Glynis - I responded to your comment earlier, but it seems to have disappeared...

    I understand what you mean - I struggled too! I'm glad they turned out okay :)

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  94. Shelley - Thanks! :)

    Haikus are fun - but I'd never tried one before. Once I got going I got in a bit of a rhythm so it got a little easier. Have fun!

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  95. Great job!! I love to write Haiku -- although I'm really not very good at it :D

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  96. Thanks Nicole :)

    I can see me teaching these at school in the coming year now - something I've never done. Because of the tight form I think the kids would have fun with it!

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  97. oooh, I love your Haiku. I have never written a haiku or attempted to write one. Maybe one day. I love reading them though.

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  98. Hannah - thanks! This was my first too - they are more fun than I expected. You kind of get into a rhythm with them :)

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