Friday, March 8, 2013

Kamy Chetty & a Giveaway!

Today we're lucky to have Kamy Chetty here on the blog!

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Hello everyone and thank you so much for having me here.

Have you ever entered a contest or gotten feedback from your crit partner or editor and in the comment section it’s highlighted in red, “show don’t tell.” The problem is no-one ever tells you how to do that. You read the books and think you’re doing your best, but are you really?

From my book:
Sophie didn’t know how long it took for the ambulance to arrive. It wouldn’t have been long, but to her, it seemed like an hour. ...With her heart about to explode in her chest, all she wanted was to take Paige in her arms and hold her. She wanted to fall to pieces like a normal parent.

Now I could have said- Sophie was so terrified that Paige wasn’t going to make it, that she held onto her and waited for the ambulance to arrive.
What I didn’t do is name the emotion. I also didn’t say she felt, or she thought but I am using the character point of view to grab the reader and pull them into the story.

So go back to your current piece of work and choose something that has an emotion mention, now have a look at how you can change that by not naming the emotion. Have some fun with it. I would love to hear some of your ideas and make it relevant to your character if you can.
I’ll be giving away an eCopy of my book, Falling Into Paradise to one commenter.

Kamy Chetty around the web:
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Falling Into Paradise
A woman too afraid to commit. A man too hurt to love again. A passion that refuses to be denied.

Sophie Redmond knew betrayal, she knew mistrust. She knew everything that was wrong with the world, until Damon Watson charmed his way into her life.

The rules she used to shield her heart were broken one by one, as Damon showed her compassion and kindness.
When no one else believes in her, he shows her hope. But is hope ever enough?

Damon knew trouble when he saw it. He was the sheriff. He could spot it a mile away and Sophie was trouble with a capital T. What was it about this City Slicker doctor that made him want to forget everything but those whiskey brown eyes and that honey blonde hair spilled against his naked chest.

Can Damon put the past behind him and choose to love again?

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Great advice, Kamy! Showing sure isn't always easy - but it sure brings the reader into the story. I'll have to do a search for 'felt' in my story and see how I'm doing. Anyone else have trouble with not telling?

Good luck to everyone for the giveaway!

32 comments:

  1. Hi Kamy and Jemi
    The "show not tell" method is the one piece of writerly advice that everybody talks about.
    Kamy, thanks for explaining it by using a great example from your story. You made it quite clear.


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  2. Great tip that we should check for instances where we've named the emotion!

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  3. Great advice, Kamy. Thanks for sharing it.

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  4. Michelle - it is a great example! :)

    Elizabeth - I agree - I've got to do a Find search on my ms :)

    Natalie - I agree! :)

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  5. Describe the emotion without naming it - good tip!

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  6. Awww Damon and Sophie were so made for each other! The blurb totally sizzled! Yay!!

    Hi Kamy, hi Jemi!

    Take care
    x

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  7. Ooh, I struggle with that. Great advice!

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  8. Great advice. Thanks so much for giving an example. It really helped!
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    Your book sounds really spicy!

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  9. I especially loved reading this advice and the example. It made the idea of showing not telling much clearer to me. Thanks so much! Awesome post!
    ~Jess

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  10. Explaining show vs. tell is always difficult. You did a good job here.

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  11. Alex - agreed! :)

    Old Kitty - it really does! :)

    Jennifer - I need to remember to avoid that telling too!

    Mel - examples always help me too :)

    Jess - me too! I work much better with examples :)

    Linda - I agree!

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  12. Advice straight from the horses mouth. No other kind!

    I see Kamy you're a fellow Kiwi! I wish you well and hope you sell lots of books :)

    Hi Jemi!

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  13. Wendy - always glad to bring my Kiwi friends together! :)

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  14. Hi everybody thank you so much for coming by and saying hello.Jemi thank you for having me.
    Mel, the book is spicy, I kept on saying- it's got a high heat level and then realised it is actually erotica romance but I'm still not telling mum that.
    Wendy always great to have a fellow Kiwi around
    I'm glad you liked the article;-)

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  15. That's a great exercise. I'll look for areas where emotion is mentioned and write them differently.

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  16. Kamy - always best not to tell mum!! :) So glad you came by to visit :)

    Medeia - it really is! I've spotted a few in my wip :)

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  17. It's always a pleasure Jemi. Medeia so great to see you here. I always have to go back when I am editing and find those words like, felt or thought- you almost have to use the find feature and figure out how to rewrite it- that's why everyone shys away from editing:-)

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  18. Kamy - I LOVE the Find feature - one of my best friends during editing! :)

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  19. Great post Kamy! Thanks for sharing!

    Hi Jemi!

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  20. Hi Nas - Kamy is great, isn't she? :)

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  21. Aww Jemi and Nas- you two are going to have to call the sheriff to get rid of me:-) but Jemi you have such a great blog here and some people over to visit too:-)

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  22. Thanks Kamy - I do have FANTASTIC bloggy friends! :)

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  23. Showing vs. telling is harder than it sounds! It's one of the most common pieces of writing advice, and it's an easy concept to grasp, but once you're in the middle of writing... it doesn't always come that easy. (At least not to me. Guess I shouldn't speak for other writers.) :)

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  24. Shelley - it really is tougher than you'd think. And you can speak for me any time :)

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  25. It's always so interesting to read what other writers have to say about writing . Thanks so much.

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  26. Lee - I agree - we all hav our own take on various pieces of advice! :)

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  27. Hello, Kamy and Jemi. A good reminder of what we should be doing in our writing. Showing makes for a much richer reading experience. Hope your promo for Falling Into Paradise is going well.

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  28. Hi JL! I agree - showing draws the reader right in! :)

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  29. Oooooh, I love that filter. Off to finesse some emotions.

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  30. Great example! Simple and direct. :D

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  31. Shelly you're so right, it never comes easy when you're writing. That's why I find myself fixing things during editing. It's a nightmare and I realize I use passive words instead of active, I hate editing but it really helps.
    Lee, I always learn from others, I am like a sponge wanting to know more all the time.
    Thanks J.L- so far the promo is going well- and showing is great for that emotional journey which is what we want:-)
    Hi Leslie- glad you find this helpful.
    Thanks Lisa- again- glad it's useful. Thanks for visiting everyone:-)

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  32. Leslie - me too! :)

    Lisa - exactly - and that always works best! :)

    Thanks again Kamy! :)

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