Hello everyone and thank you so much for having me here.
Have you ever entered a contest or gotten feedback from your crit partner or editor and in the comment section it’s highlighted in red, “show don’t tell.” The problem is no-one ever tells you how to do that. You read the books and think you’re doing your best, but are you really?
From my book:Sophie didn’t know how long it took for the ambulance to arrive. It wouldn’t have been long, but to her, it seemed like an hour. ...With her heart about to explode in her chest, all she wanted was to take Paige in her arms and hold her. She wanted to fall to pieces like a normal parent.
Now I could have said- Sophie was so terrified that Paige wasn’t going to make it, that she held onto her and waited for the ambulance to arrive.What I didn’t do is name the emotion. I also didn’t say she felt, or she thought but I am using the character point of view to grab the reader and pull them into the story.
So go back to your current piece of work and choose something that has an emotion mention, now have a look at how you can change that by not naming the emotion. Have some fun with it. I would love to hear some of your ideas and make it relevant to your character if you can.I’ll be giving away an eCopy of my book, Falling Into Paradise to one commenter.
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Falling Into ParadiseA woman too afraid to commit. A man too hurt to love again. A passion that refuses to be denied.
Sophie Redmond knew betrayal, she knew mistrust. She knew everything that was wrong with the world, until Damon Watson charmed his way into her life.
The rules she used to shield her heart were broken one by one, as Damon showed her compassion and kindness.
When no one else believes in her, he shows her hope. But is hope ever enough?
Damon knew trouble when he saw it. He was the sheriff. He could spot it a mile away and Sophie was trouble with a capital T. What was it about this City Slicker doctor that made him want to forget everything but those whiskey brown eyes and that honey blonde hair spilled against his naked chest.
Can Damon put the past behind him and choose to love again?
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Great advice, Kamy! Showing sure isn't always easy - but it sure brings the reader into the story. I'll have to do a search for 'felt' in my story and see how I'm doing. Anyone else have trouble with not telling?
Good luck to everyone for the giveaway!