Monday, August 12, 2019

Rania Battany & Fleeting Moments

Please welcome Rania Battany to the blog today!

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Writing craft: Showing not telling.
We all know as writers that we need to show and not tell. If you struggle to understand the difference between the two, you can rest assured that you are not alone. Once it clicks, it seems simple. Until then, it can be daunting and confusing. 
Put simply, telling is exactly that: you are telling the reader how to feel and what to think. Telling usually uses fewer words and, to be blunt, requires less creativity. You are reporting the story to your reader, rather than trusting them to deduce the information for themselves.
Take the following example of telling vs showing
- Sally was happy.
- Sally’s eyes beamed. She smiled, and deep lines creased her cheeks.
Above, we are told that Sally is happy, but we do not feel any of her joy. In the below sentence, we are not specifically told how Sally is feeling, and yet we can gather from her beaming eyes and deep smile that she is happy.
Consider the following:
- John hurt Sally with his words.
- John’s words pierced Sally to her core. Her lips quivered, and her shoulders crumpled in towards her broken heart.

Not only can we feel how much John hurt Sally in the second example, but we become empathetic towards her, making us much more deeply invested in her pain. As authors, we want our readers to be invested in our characters. Showing allows the reader to paint the scene in their mind, encouraging them to come to conclusions for themselves. Showing also allows the reader to become a part of the experience. It takes them deeper into the character’s story, so that they feel what the character feels, see what they see, and experience what they experience. This deeper connection to the character enhances the reading journey and draws the reader into the world you’ve created.
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Rania Battany lives with her husband and three children in the beautiful Yarra Ranges, Victoria, Australia. When she isn’t getting her hands dirty in the garden, frolicking with her chickens or dog, or chasing after her three young children, she is writing contemporary romance novels that tug at the heartstrings or curled up with a cup of tea and a book.
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Fleeting Moments
Maya is floundering. She’s stuck in a dead-end job, is isolated from family and friends, and her father—the only person that ever truly understood her—has been gone four years. When her boyfriend leaves her for another woman, the rocky foundations of Maya’s life crumble to dust, and she sinks even further into the pit of grief and despair.

Until she meets him. Sam. The one with the animated smile and gentle eyes, who always sees the positive no matter how bad the negative. And the one who reignites Maya’s passion through his enthusiasm and zest, helping to rebuild her life, piece by piece.

But when ghosts from Maya’s past resurface, her decisions almost destroy the few important relationships she has left, and the happiness she’s so recently found is threatened. She must overcome her demons and decide what matters most—the familiarity of the past, or the hope, love and possibilities of the future.
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Thanks, Rania! Beautiful cover for the book!

Those are great examples for showing rather than telling. How about you? Do you struggle to Show, not Tell? Do you like the round of editing where you search for those Tells and change them to Shows?

10 comments:

  1. I used to struggle with it until I read a book by Jessica Bell and she also used examples. Then it clicked!

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    1. It's wonderful when that happens, isn't it... the "light bulb" moment.

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  2. I'm currently editing a book and the main issue is the telling rather than showing. Removing passive words like "was" is also a good start to changing the sentence to something more active.

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    1. I learnt so much from my first editor about showing not telling. It was one of the most valuable tools I'd ever been taught.

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  3. Important advice and a good explanation! This was one of the hardest things for me to learn when I was starting out.

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    1. Agreed! It was certainly one of the hardest things for me to learn too. Once it clicks, it's such a wonderful feeling.

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  4. Your examples are great. It's something that I've been thinking of for awhile.

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    1. Thank you, Natalie. It's a tricky one but once you have it, it sticks!

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  5. Great examples. Perhaps a writer needs to develop/show their empathy with their characters...?

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    1. Yes, perfect! Once a writer feels deeper empathy with their characters, it makes the showing much easier.

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