This was not the day to improvise. This was the day to follow the recipe to the letter. She wasn’t generally much of a recipe follower—or rule follower for that matter—but today, she’d do it exactly as prescribed.
The recipe called for the flour to be scooped into the measuring cup and then levelled off with a knife. Ridiculous, but she did it anyway. Same with the cocoa powder and the sugars.
Next, she cracked the eggs and whipped them gently in a small bowl. She measured out the other ingredients and set them in a row so she would be sure to add them in the correct order.
Melting good chocolate apparently required placing one bowl over a pot with boiling water inside. And not quite a rolling boil, something she’d never heard before but could now identify.
She used the whisk and whipped the chocolate with some butter. It did smell good. Really good. But taking a taste would maybe screw up the final results and that wasn’t acceptable. This had to be perfect. Just like mom used to make.
Once the mixture was in the preheated oven, she set the timer and cleaned up the mess. So many dishes just to make some brownies!
The timer finally beeped and she set the pan to cool. Another timer and when the brownies were cool enough, she cut them and put them on the flowered plate her grandmother loved so much.
Knowing how much the older woman hated a mess, she checked to make sure she didn’t have any stains on her clothes. Between that and the clean kitchen, there was no evidence she’d even been in the kitchen.
Perfect.
She knocked on her grandmother’s door and waited for her reply before entering.
“Those smell like Diane's brownies. No one makes brownies like you do, Diane.”
Her mother hadn’t been home for over a year. Who knew where she was this time. Her grandmother's face fell when she realized she wasn't the beloved Diane. “These are delicious. Tell your mother thank you. Why don’t you leave the plate?”
She smiled and nodded, then stepped out of the room.
When the next timer beeped, she wiped off the doorknob and entered her grandmother's room again. With her gloves on, she wiped off where she'd touched the plate and then checked to ensure the old woman was dead.
Slipping out the back door with her hood up, she headed for the subway. She’d be back in her dorm when someone called with the sad news.
And then she’d be rich.
Tagline: Not quite how mom used to make
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23 comments:
I totally didn't see the ending coming. It's a great story.
Brownies have always been a favorite, but to consider them full of poison, such heartbreak. I certainly hope they catch her before the money is released!
Oh-oh! I expected a gentle story of love and chocolate but got a murder mystery instead. Very disturbing.
Not like mother used to make indeed. Dark, clever and unexpected. Thank you.
OMG Jemi! I didn't expect that. I thought it was all about filling in for her mom. The tagline is awesome and misleading too. Wow!
What a twisted fractured fairy tale, Jemi. Shall I call you the Wicked Witch? Grandma didn't see that coming, nor did I. Chocolate, like wine, makes a good disguise for poison. At least her final taste was yummy.
Hi Jemi - well told tale - I wonder where Diane is ... perhaps she's secretly watching ... yet she wouldn't sell out her own daughter would she? If Diane reappears - she'll inherit rather than this murderous daughter - loved the read - and now I know how to make brownies ... I've never followed the rules either! Congratulations - cheers Hilary
Hi,
My first thought was, oh horrible, after getting to the end of the story.
Maybe she killed her mother too.
Very well written.
Shalom shalom
Natalie - thanks!
Yolanda - I love brownies too - hope this doesn't taint them for us!!
Olga - Oops! :)
Sue - thanks Sue, it's fun to travel the dark side in fiction occasionally :)
Sonia - thanks! It was a fun and evil thing to write :)
Hilary - LOL - I wonder about Diane as well!
Pat - Thanks - she's definitely not a nice one!
Wicked! If this story is ever turned into a book, this is a character I'd love to see caught. She's the sort that people love to hate. Tweeted.
I was so lost in reading the recipe and imagining the perfect brownies that I didn't see the horrific end coming. :)
Loved it!
This story surprised most of your readers! I didn't expect such a dark tale and now wonder what led the granddaughter to poison those brownies! Disturbing and very well written.
OO - I'd love to see her caught as well!
Shilpa - LOL - sorry! I think I may need to make some brownies to cleanse my palate! :)
Beth - thanks! I can't write disturbing things in long fiction, but it's weirdly fun to do it with shorts!
No, not the way her mother made them at all, lol. Wow, this was awesome. Good thing she did not take that little taste.
That was some unexpected ending! :) Great flash and a dark but fun take on the prompt. Poisoned brownies...maybe she's done away with Diane too? Else how is she sure of inheriting? :)
Dolorah - yup! Or maybe that would have been better for her grandma!
Nila - exactly!
Oh no! Totally din't see that coming. Well written and disguised... Looking back it was just rolling along, but like Jamie's post, the Parents and Grandparents can harm the children so much that they'll even stoop to murder. I have been thoroughly warned as a mother of 2 and a Grandmother of 4... yikes!
That just went from heartwarming to I did not see that coming very quickly.
Whoa. Didn't see that ending coming. Nice work.
Wow. You stinker!! What a knock-up ending!! I'm obviously very late to this party but glad I read about your brownies!
Carole - Sadly true - that previous generations can cause such harm. Thankfully, most people are good And I'm 100% sure you're safe! :)
Bernadette - LOL - apparently I was in a mood when I wrote this one :)
Jamie - thanks! flash is fun for those surprise endings :)
Yvonne - LOL - thanks! I'm normally a romance writer, but this was fun!
Love the twist! So much for "sweet" eh? 😉😄
Love the story! Flash fiction is always fun :)
Looking forward to Built of Illusions.
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